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      From: Ken Hill <kenfhill84083@gmail.com> 
      To: Boyd Clayton <boydclayton@utah.gov> 
      Date: Tuesday - September 15, 2009 7:08 PM 
      Subject: appendix 1  >  1.1  >  sentence is convoluted 




      I think the first sentence of appendix 1, 1.1 needs fixing.  The first 
      comma is unneeded.  The phrase "for the purpose of providing an 
      early-warning indication as to whether, in combination with the 
      hydrologic monitoring component, SNWA groundwater development in Snake 
      Valley is causing adverse effects" does not make sense because of a 
      misplaced comma.  This sounds like snwa's pumping and hydrologic 
      monitoring may cause adverse effects.  I have supplied a fixed version.  
      Does this need to be in a written comment?

      ---original version ---
      The intent of the biological monitoring considered here, is to collect a 
      suite of ecologically informative data, at Key Areas of Biological 
      Concern (KABCs), for the purpose of providing an early-warning 
      indication as to whether, in combination with the hydrologic monitoring 
      component, SNWA groundwater development in Snake Valley is causing 
      adverse effects.

      --- better (if accurate) ---
      The intent of the biological monitoring considered here is to collect a 
      suite of ecologically informative data, at Key Areas of Biological 
      Concern (KABCs), for the purpose of providing an early-warning 
      indication, in combination with the hydrologic monitoring component, as 
      to whether SNWA groundwater development in Snake Valley is causing 
      adverse effects.


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